Storyboard Critiques

I was assigned to crit Katherine and Jenna's storyboards and they both have to approve comments on their wordpress so I am putting my comments on here in case they forget to do so and we need to pull them up in class!

Katherine's storyboard:
Good job being clear in your notes about transitions and timing! They were easy to follow and understand.

For the most part, you do a good job mixing up text and image so that its not becoming too literal! There were a few instances where I saw it happening though... In the 4th frame maybe you don't even need to say 'nails. yuck' and in stead just say 'yuck' since the image of the nails is saying the same thing. This way the viewer can make the connection on their own. I'm thrown off a bit in the 8th frame where you are showing feet and saying 'alright, we're movin' to the driveway' I am wondering if it is even necessary?

In most cases, when you are making a big jump from image to image it is working well to create unexpected moments but maybe consider cutting some of the images that don't seem to be doing that. For example.. in the frame with the nail polish remover and the text that says 'hello' I get a little confused.. why not get ride of that image (since you've already shown the nail polish remover in the images before) and put the hello with the image of you waving your hand?

I enjoy the design overall! I like the use of circles and how you play with their scale and placement. maybe think about trying some different typefaces or incorporating some color in areas where you want to create emphasis. maybe red type to relate to the red nail polish?

Jenna's storyboard:
Your notes are definitely clear!

There are a few cases when the story is becoming a bit literal either with the text or the sound.. consider changing the dialogue so that the text isn't necessarily explaining what is happening in the photo. What happens if instead of the sound of the light bulb going on with the image of the light bulb you pair it with the sound of a vacuum as a way of suggesting that your idea involves cleaning it up in some way. That might create a unexpected moment when the spiral of m&ms appears instead of them being vacuumed up.

Also, the first few frames are doing the same thing. maybe think of a way that you can break these images up. I really enjoy the part where you introduce the cat.. makes for a great surprise twist to the story!

As for design.. think about integrating the type into the images more and try out different typefaces/colors. The type seems to be a afterthought and instead, should be designed further. try cropping images in different ways to create interesting compositions to work with!